Tuesday, February 26, 2008

Blog 9-Dear Auntie

Dear Auntie,

I'm so scared. So much has happened, that shouldn't have. Two boys have already died while we've been on the island. I could have stopped both of them also. First a littlun burned in the fire that I watched burn the whole side of the mountain. Then, the other night, one of the bigguns, was murdered. Jack and his hunters actually murdered him. I've been trying not to believe it, but it happened right before me. Even with my one eye, I could see exactly what was going on. Just the thought of it makes me shudder.

I remember the hunters awkward, gesticulate performance. Every stomp they made sent water flying. The rain seemed to be doing the dance with them. Thundering after every evil chant and dropping rain making clapping noises to go with theirs. I remember just being glad that I wasn't the center of attention.

When Simon crawled out of the forest, I thought he was the beast also. At first I was glad Jack was there to protect Ralph and I. But then I heard Simon's cries. Something about the beast on the mountain.

All at once, they smothered him. Jumping and ripping. The screams and shrieks filled my ears and my feet were glued to the ground. I wanted to help, I really did. I didn't want to admit to anyone, but I was scared. Ralph said he wasn't, but I'm sure he was. Jack has always scared me. But now I've seen what he can do and thats what scares me the most. I don't think the awful scene will ever leave my mind.

If that wasn't enough Jack came to our camp last night, and stole my specks. I cant see a thing.

We were all sleeping. I heard a rustle outside our hut, I thought it was the beast. It called my name. Ralph had to stifle my cries so they wouldn't know where we were. They found us though. They fight was brutal. I thought for sure they would kill us and take the conch. Why didn't they want the conch? Eric had blood al over his face. And Ralph was in a lot of pain also. And I can't see a thing! It was only today when the sun came up, and cast a phosphorescent glow on the ocean that I could see anything. I don't know how we'll ever make a signal fire without my specks, or me being able to see.

I hope that i'll see you soon. Love you,
Piggy

3 comments:

srosenstock said...

Quinn-

I love that you rote your blog in the form of a letter. This made it really creative and different from all the other blogs.

I also really liked this part

"The rain seemed to be doing the dance with them. Thundering after every evil chant and dropping rain making clapping noises to go with theirs."

because you used personification and made the rain dance and clap. This added detailed and kept me interested while reading your blog.

srosenstock said...

Quinn-

I really liked your blog ut i think you could had more detail about how Piggy can't see. Besides that you blog was great and i didn't see any other room for improvement.

-Sianni

hunter said...

"All at once, they smothered him. Jumping and ripping. The screams and shrieks filled my ears and my feet were glued to the ground. I wanted to help, I really did. I didn't want to admit to anyone, but I was scared"

I could really visualize what was happenning in this part. it really describes how frightened he was and why. My feet would be glued to the ground to if i was watching that happen. -hunter